Uarrrgh! \m/
First off, hello thar fellow b.c. rich wanka! Cool riffage man. Some things you might consider upgrading. ^^
Teh drums. Could sound a bit clearer in the mix. Might add some reverb on the snare too. Guitar tone is a bit too fuzzy for my taste. Not bad, but for leads it isn't very helpful, incase you consider doing some. The track has bass right!? At least I think it has. ^^ IF it has bass, I suggest another tone for it or a bit more volume in the mix.
Just some things I would suggest for the production. The preview is pretty cool by far. Keep hitting shit! \m/
Thanks for your vote, DarKsidE555! You voted 5 for THIS (Short demo version), raising its score from 4.75 to 4.80.